I don't know exactly why, but I like this one better than the last.

"Her thoughts but a course that form but a square,"
^ I'm not too crazy about that line for some reason... When I read it, it just doesn't sound right. :/

Other than that, you did a magnificent job. It was an emotional write & overall, there was nothing wrong. :) 5.5 Keep writing.

--- Stephanie Lynn .+.

I really liked this poem, it has a lot of emotion within. The flow and the structure where both good. And your wording was excellent. Keep up the great work.

Peace, Joe

Excellent!

i can feel the sadness, every lines were filled by emotions. the whole thing is made of sad experiences..same as the others it rhymes so well..so it flowed out right again..

keep it up!

I absolutely love this one. It was very sad and familiar. again, 5/5

This is absolutely perfect! the words && the flow were great! it was full of emotion and it was just perfect all together...5/5 from me, again! keep it up!

Jenna

I love this poem
it flows great
good job
5/5