Honestly, at first I didn`t think that I was going to like this, but as I kept reading, you really pulled me in. :] Great descriptions, usually with short lines, it gets harder to be descriptive and pull the reader in, but you did a great job.

"So if you meet the heartbreak man
You better run and hide
For if he catches up with you
He'll break your heart, like mine "

^^ LOVED those lines. A great ending.

5.5
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This is good, I can relate. I'm sure a lot of people can, cos it's something that happens a lot. I love the flow of the poem, you got your point through even though it was short.

Haha... really liked it and i'm not trying to plug my own stuff (swear down) but this well reminds me of my 'the illusionsit' glad to see i'm not the only one who thinks men have alot to answer for! (even though i'm a) a man and b) not gay...) my half of the species owes your half some serious apologising.

This is very well written..straight from the heart...awesome job,bud.