Well I like the angst and hatred but as for the structure it needs a little bit more work other then that it was pretty good
kaila

It is very clear that there was a LOT of emotion put into this poem. It is a wonderful poem. The wording and flow was perfect. 5/5

Kalee

Excellent!

i can see much effort, the ideas were filled with emotions. but i think there is something in this maybe, but it was great

Keep it up!

Needless to say, your message was extremely powerful, but wonderful, too! 5/5

So much anger and angst.
I was going to put that it expressed alot of emotion in this poem .. but that doesn't cut it .. This is pure, out and out passion, vengeance and such raw emotion.
I absolutely love the intensity of this piece, as you read it you can almost sense the author getting more and more frustrated.

Great poem.
Loved every second of it.

~Pete.

Wow, I could feel the hatrrid and anger in some parts. This poem was powerful and very filled with emotion.

Wow. I could feel EVERYTHING that you were talking about! I could feel your protectiveness and it was AWESOME! lol. Great great wonderful job.
*~NearlyCrazy6~*