Comments : Thinking Of You

  • 16 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    This was well written, cute and sweetly worded poem. An enjoyable read.
    with love, Tara-Kay
    x

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    "And yet I find myself stuck at home" << . . . and yet, I find. . .
    Don't forget commas. (:

    "But when you find yourself alone feeling something's missing
    I hope you think of me"
    Try to keep the lines about the same length. Maybe take some out of the first line and add it to the second line?

    Overall, Nicole, it's a great poem. I loved it, along witht he meaning of it. The flow was about flawless, excluding the last stanza, first two lines, and the rhyme was great.
    Punctuation [[periods,commas,semi-colons]] usually clean a poem up, not always, but in this case it would have made it look neat. Don't get me wrong, it was a good poem.
    But, that kind of stuff helps with the looks. Though, looks don't mean everything.. they do help.

    4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Jo Anna EL

    I love all your work nicole.One of my favorites.your poetry really speaks to me and tells your story.i hope you continue writing...

    ~jo Anna eternallover

  • 15 years ago

    by SIMPLY ME

    Yeah,this is a good poem too!!!!!