Comments : Keep That Piece

  • 14 years ago

    by Pete

    Yet another wonderful poem. Its all about the heartache and wondering. I often wonder how you write these poems so heartfelt. I hope and pray to whatever god is up there that you didn't have to endure the ordeals you write about.
    Builds you up like a crescendo to the point where its almost a certainty that you will leave, then hits you with a sledgehammer when he walks out first.

    "Desperate attention
    It became what I craved
    Some recognition
    That you'd want what I gave"

    Great lines, thats what every relationship is about .. wishing you had something the other person desired or wanted.

    Lovely poem Charisma.
    Keep it up.

  • 14 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    Great poem. i realy like it.
    espcially the last stanza. 5/5.

  • 14 years ago

    by Cuddles

    I don't want the piece
    That's still loving you.

    Such beautiful last lines, and they pull everything together so wonderfully. Truly amazing all the way through. Great rhythm, great rhyme scheme, and the consistent feeling felt throughout the piece...powerful.

  • 13 years ago

    by TillyMariex