Wow. Let me gather my thoughts for a second.

That was the most amazing poem I have ever read. It was very...real and emotionally packed. I related to it well and Im sure other can too. I liked the set up and structure of it. It was different than any other poem. Great write, keep it up!

~Morgan~

One of my favorite parts of the poem is the additional line after each stanzas. It really was a creative take to making the poem flow better. I've never seen it done quite so well.

The entirety of the poem fits the format of the poem, with the pauses and somewhat jumbled lines adding to the struggle that seems to be happening throughout the poem. Very nicely written.

I thought it very good, i wrote a poem with pretty much the same format some time ago and i must say i'm pleased at the originality

your servant:
atticus

Wow i love the way its written first of all. and second

Discover the emotions inside,
So I made up feelings
That I do not really feel,
So I could be far away--far away from real,
And, the truth which eats at me;
The gore which will come:
The truth is I've succumb and died, because I was too scared to)

i never thot i cud relate to sumthing more. perfect 5

Great poem..! Really.. I loved it very much

This is really great- I love how you put certain pieces in parenthases- it really makes the poem have more feeling. From what I've read, your a very creative poet- thats really cool. I take it you wouldn't be afraid to try new styles?