I'll never forget

by NearlyCrazy6   Oct 9, 2007


I love all of your smiles
From ear to ear it goes on for miles
It's very handsome, just like you
Although now I can't see them, I'm blue

All I have to look at are pictures
They act like lures
Pulling me back to your love
Soaring toward you like a dove

No matter the cause
I still love you because
When I think of you I get all giddy
I feel like I'm in a huge city

I know that you love me too
Just like when I could see you
I'll never forget
Or feel like our love was wrong and regret

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  • 16 years ago

    by nikki

    It was a good piece, but didn't really
    make sense with the words you used.
    ex: huge city. but apart from that it
    was great. 4/5 from me

    nikki

  • 16 years ago

    by shawn

    Hmm, i agree a few parts seem a tad bit forced, and in the second stanza first line, i might change that "is" to "are", and also in the third line maybe change the "to" to "towards", other than that it's a great poem and i know how it feels to have somone close move away. 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    Well some lines I felt that the rhyming was a tad forced because I felt as though you were just using that word so it would rhyme so I didn't think you did your best there but as for the emotion and idea I've been here so I know what it feels like so thats why I sympothize with you 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by ECILA ice

    This is seems too common and simple but honestly i love the emotion in here because of the emotions in here, it was sweet. keep it up!

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    "like I'm in a huge city" << I think that might sound better as "huge, huge city. " but that's just my idea.

    Darling, I love the poem. It's really really good. I loved the first stanza especially. (:

    Keep it up, it's amazing
    [[Sorry such a short comment, not much to say.. the poem was just about flawless.]]

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