Comments : Dear Ana

  • 16 years ago

    by Angie

    OK first thing, since I'm such a stickler for spelling, lol.... you have the word "of" 2x and it should be "off".... other than that it flows and rhymes perfectly.

    Its sad yet seems filled with hope, sometimes those other voices help us to see what we've missed.... amazing write dizzy, but that's what I've come to expect from you anyways.... keep up the awesome work.

  • 16 years ago

    by my name is Llama

    This is really sad. i have a friend going through a quite bad ED at the moment and this poem really helped me to understand her better. i love how you referred to anorexia and bulima as ana and mia. I'm not sure if it was intentional but i felt as if by giving them human names they showed the amount of power and control they can have. i actually think this may be the first ED poem i have read on here. well done xoxo

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Jenni, This piece was beautifully sad, I really can't express how much this poem hit my heart in so many different ways. You have a way with poetry, you make the reader feel what you are feeling, you express yourself in such great depth that it's breathtaking. I love your word choice, They seemed so simple and so effective. So many people i'm sure can relate to this poem. I loved how you used personification by giving the eating disorders actual names. It really made this piece come alive. Well done. Such a great read. ~Mel

  • 16 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Okay. I can honestly say thati loved that whole poem.
    I'm not the brigtest bulb in the bunch so at first the poem confused me.. Like just the first stanza. But once i kept reading i understood it totally. and i was sitting there thinking "my god this is great, She said that we had to say things we liked, didn't like, or thought could be improved, Well everything was perfect nothing could be improved"
    so anyways,
    I think it was great and except from a couple words that I didn't really get, It was perfect and doesn't need improvement.

    xoxo
    --Chelsey

  • 16 years ago

    by Wallace

    Good job, the flow was awesome, and I like how you didnt try to make it too fancy just nice and easy. One stanza really stood out to me and it was this one;

    "You're weak and deep down you know it
    That's why you've come crawling back to me
    So make a choice now, abide by my rules
    And I'll make you someone beautiful to see."

    Excellent poem 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Gem

    Oh my... what a truly chilling yet amazing poem

    Your flow was immpecable. Flowed right from my tongue. And i loved how you gave those horrible mental illnesses names and made them seem almost human..
    Well done Jen, this is going on my faves
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 16 years ago

    by Reminders Torture

    This was amazing as well Jenni. You have done such a wonderful work. The rhyming was good and the flow was awesome. Honestly this piece was great. Each stanza was very well written.
    Take care <3

  • 16 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    I love this poem, it is so beautiful. It gives of all sorts of different meanings to different people. Its brilliant how people can reflect upon it in a soft or sincere way. Vunerability amongst young girls is vibrant and most of the time very painful to encounter or even watch you conveyed your ideas brilliantly here. Nice job xxx alex xxx

  • 16 years ago

    by NearlyCrazy6

    I really like this poem. It does have different meanings to different people like what alex said. I loved the flow and word choice but i think it couldve been longer and had some extra words to make it sound better. Overall though great job.
    *~NearlyCrazy6~*

  • 16 years ago

    by VYXSIN

    Seriously deep and amazing, i really enjoyed reading this poem, i cant really make out what it means, maybe thats just me, but i really like this poem, so well written and emotional.

    xx

  • 16 years ago

    by Robert

    I am very pleased with this work, I loved the message and the description was very well played out your story telling capibility is great keep up the awsome work Plot121