I loved your linking it to things everyone knows and can picture in their heads, makes the poem more powerful-er...

the last stanza is my favourite, it really capped off a wonderful poem, nice imaginery.

5/5 david

I've got to say the title captivated me, and I just had to read this one! Haha.

Oh my gosh! That was pure genius! I don't even know what to say about this poem.. I'm at a loss of words. It like hypnotized me. I couldn't stop reading, I couldn't even look away from the words. It was just so very good.. Your use of words was outstanding. I loved all your descriptions, I could see everything that was happening inside my mind. It was like one big story.. a scary story.. a nightmare. Your similes and metaphors blew me away.

This was definitely one of my favorite poems.. ever. o.o I'm adding you to my favorites, because I'm falling in love with your poetry!

Amazing.

Keep writing!
Cayce