This one is my favrite. it reminds me of stuff. yeah. good job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

mandy

See you're already improving. You did a good job with spacing and rhyming..BTW i like that you recognized that you don't always have to.

The only thing you could add to make it better wld be to stress the desperation, b/c if the narrator is considering cutting himself or w/e then it wld be some extreme feeling

good job!

The flow was a bit off...but other than that it was good...keep it up

This poem is cool :)
it shows emotion and really gets the point across that you are trying to make.
great work

5/5

I loved this It was very good I could feel your emotions great job!

I liked it. the flow was a bit off but stil it was Great. it also does remind me of things in my pass. it was very nicly writen. you did another Great job here. Keep it up!

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy