This was a very strong poem, a lot of emotion in it. I think the only thing you can do is: rhyme. rhyming brings so much power to a poem. for an example you last line would have been amazing if it would have rhymed .. how about this: ?

Not only from this evil place
Save me for I own some worth
Save me from my hurting self
And bring me to a higher Earth
Well hey i tried ;) Great poem other than that. I really liked this stanza:

I no longer want to be held prisoner
In the trenches of the evil that bound me
For I would rather be a slave of justice
Than one of the cruelty surrounding me

Excellent Job

5/5