Nice story more like a book though lol. but for real i enjoyed this it gave me a smile.
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Very beautiful and I love long poems. This one flows very well and I just remembered my poem called"Hide it conceal it...." U could check it! :)

5/5 all the way

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Fsams

Wow...that was a long poem...but i liked it! flowed very well and beautiful..very sweet 5/5

You have a very unique way of wrighting for me I found your poem a little to long and you also put tou it should have been you.

LOVE IT

Hmm well.... It's very good, and the flow is ok, but not what it could be. Also the poem lacked something... I feel it could have had more feeling, but thats just my opinion.

4/5, its good, but certainly not your best effort