I wouldn't say its a "cruddy" poem, it's got a lot of meaning and depth behind it, it could just use some editing. Keep at your work!

Hey i love this poem i dont think itz cruddy at all keep it up :)

This is Definitely not a cruddy poem!!! keep it up, man!!

Interesting and sad. enjoyable tho. I loved
the ".I feel the world fall
and spin and twist
then i get
my one last wish" part.....The poem was formed from a twisted mind in a twisted heartbreaking way but it was enjoyable.....5/5