Your second stanza had many powerful lines in it...too many to mention. i think the piece was really good despite the lack of flow sometimes, where there were one too many syllables in a stanza or something. But besides that it was really good and well put.
*ME*

5/5 wow this poem waz really good...i think it flowed really good and it waz very deep...newayz keep writing cuz u are really good and what u do

much luv
peachez