Such amazing imagination potrayed in this poem... The flow of your words were captivating as the details and your interesting interpretation of illusion...

I shoot the Moon,
pointed out hostility,
let the desperation be my blazon.

Great work! :)

An amazing choosing of words. Every word connects to the other in a great flow. I liked the partial rhyming and the concept of this song. A definite 5/5

This was another really great poem
and the imagery created was really powerful
and again the word choice was good !
i loved how you ended the poem in this one and your use of metaphor.
you told me you tthought my poem would have been better with metaphor. i agree. i just find it hard to use.
but you use it so perfectly !
5/5

cindy

Worn*

dude that is one of the most randomest poems ive ever read...
0_0 *gasp* =p hehe... nah but its good, it just flows really well no matter what random thought you switched to..i liked it, although I didnt get it enough to connect with it..

Wonderful job!
your imagery and vocabulary was just outstanding
nice job
i truly enjoyed it
i dont see any room for improving on this one
5/5
kaila

Wow a trully powerful poem again this one really touched me very amazing very good i loved very much your trully a really great poet and one of my favorite authors 5/5

Wow...
I love this piece. I read it four times by now. The imagery is absolutely fantastic and the portrayed emotions endlessly intense. Whole piece is excellently written, filled with amount of touching feelings. Mixtures of emotions are truly overwhelming from the beginning to the end.
My favorite stanza is:

-I shoot the Moon,
pointed out hostility,
let the desperation be my blazon.
The love is most deathly bullet.
I'm dying in my immortality.-
^^^
I like metaphorical content of this part. Truly effective.

Keep up!

Love it. It Just wow'd Me, honestly! My eyes couldn't leave the poem as i read. you had me from the beginning to the end. I Loved it. Keep Writing. you have a lot OF Talent.
Keep It Up =]

-Ally

P.s- 5/5