Comments : The Child Is Dead

  • 12 years ago

    by chavii

    A superb poem in all sense, the meaning you have portrait with well choosen words is brilliant.So true to real life context, we all seraching for lost child within us.Loved this claasical write !

    Take care
    chavii.

  • 12 years ago

    by Lenny

    I like that. I like it a lot. The vocab used made the imagery vivid. I agree with Chavii, we are all searching for that inner child...or have lost it in a sense, lost childhood, lost that freedom..but thats just my interpretation.

  • 11 years ago

    by Tina Carr AKA Snickers

    Very deep.
    An enjoyable read.

    Nice job.

  • 11 years ago

    by Kiss My Sass

    Ah, loved this one. The words were well places to give the maximum effect and they maintained the tone the whole way through, nice job as always

  • 11 years ago

    by Spoken Silence

    "The child is long dead
    And someone has taken his place
    Using his name to progress
    Lies the body on life's sardonic bed"

    This is so emotional, this really makes me want to read more. I love how you started it, very strong. Great job.

    "Sometimes the child tries to come out of the grave
    He doesn't want to be a dead man's slave
    But he needs to die; needs to die desperately "

    Good imagery in this stanza, your words just flow so well. I like your writing style. its original and very well written.

    "But, hope the child will born again
    With his condor & all his graciousness"

    I like how you ended this poem, which seemed to be sad, with some hope. Good job!

  • 11 years ago

    by Spoken Silence

    "The child is long dead
    And someone has taken his place
    Using his name to progress
    Lies the body on life's sardonic bed"

    This is so emotional, this really makes me want to read more. I love how you started it, very strong. Great job.

    "Sometimes the child tries to come out of the grave
    He doesn't want to be a dead man's slave
    But he needs to die; needs to die desperately "

    Good imagery in this stanza, your words just flow so well. I like your writing style. its original and very well written.

    "But, hope the child will born again
    With his condor & all his graciousness"

    I like how you ended this poem, which seemed to be sad, with some hope. Good job!

  • 11 years ago

    by neo

    Beautiful

  • 11 years ago

    by Jodie Phillips

    An interesting poem. Good vocab used and a great flow. captivating good job

  • 11 years ago

    by Katie

    I love the flow to this one. It's great. I think someone can take many different meanings out of this one, and I love that about a poem.
    Awesome job, and thanks for the comment. =]

  • 11 years ago

    by Blueleo

    I struggle with this question everyday. Is it right to be a kid again? Am I expected to be an adult all the time? I think to myself of how I can let my soul be free and enjoy life, and then just one the kid in me is about to jump out, I stab it and think about my bills. I loved it with all the meaning of the word. Thanks for a great read.

  • 11 years ago

    by Siglawoo

    Really superb .... nice wording

  • 11 years ago

    by Bare My Paradox

    The fresh air of innocence is gone
    Love for the truth; that burning fire
    Life becomes so narrow; mind's like mire
    Agitated nights and broken torrid dawns

    ^^^
    Love these lines...

    There is a child within everyone that gradually dies, maybe with age, maybe with experiences. As soon as that child is exploited to the harsh venoms of the cozening and cunning world-the innocence demises and the blissful state of obliviousness shatters and mutates.

  • 11 years ago

    by Nee

    Amazing :)))
    I loved it..esp the last line
    deserves a five rate !!!
    keep it up =)

  • 11 years ago

    by rich sanchez

    Well done very deep and detailed writing good job keep up the good work! 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Synyster

    Everyone has an inner child that becomes further trapped as age and experience build. The more tainted the person, the faster that child inside dies. It's sad to see that so many people seemingly willingly kill that inner child.

    "Sometimes the child tries to come out of the grave
    He doesn't want to be a dead man's slave
    But he needs to die; needs to die desperately"

    I liked that stanza a lot. It holds a lot of imagery and power. The child wants to be free to come out and play, but its suppressed and smothered.

    God... such a depressing poem, but it's so good.

    Keep up the awesome work.

  • 11 years ago

    by Goth marionette

    But, hope the child will born again
    With his condor & all his graciousness
    He'll be back from death's vicious wilderness
    And once again life will be pure & I'll be sane

    This stanza really rocks...I liked it the most...
    The whole subject of the poem is perfectly expressed...
    Keep up the good work5/5..