Comments : Sometimes..

  • 19 years ago

    by Kristina K

    Hey Billie
    Nice poem once again. Great job in putting this piece together. Keep up the great work and I hope to read more in the future. Take care always.
    Kristina

  • 19 years ago

    by C Dodrill

    Great poem. I've been there. Gave ya a 5

  • 17 years ago

    by AI

    Personally I prefer poems with both rhythm and rhyme. Maybe I'm just reading this poem wrong, but some of your rhymes seemed forced. Therefore stripping your poem from and any form of possible rhythm or flow. Having said that though, if I was only looking for those two factors alone, I would be looking up "songs" not poetry.

    So on the more positive side of things, its clear that you can convey your message without difficulty. A message which reminds me of someone in my life, so I can relate to this poem, if only partially.

    And finally though this poem isn't what I would call "my cup of tea", I did enjoy reading it, in fact, I read it many times over. As for a score card, I'm leaning more towards a four then a three, if there was a 3.8 that would be my pick, but since its dedicated to an "AI" and coincidentally thats me, though its not me, but you get the drift. I'm going just give you a 4 through generosity. Anyways you are indeed a talented author, hope you keep writing and remember time can only make you better.

    AI- Anonymous Indefinitely

    Ps. Sorry for the long winded reply. I like to write.