Wow, great poem. Totally on my favs!!! 5/5

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Most of that made little sense to me. the style was confusing and the concept was a bit vague. perhaps you should plan out a bit more before you just write.

3.5

Wow...I too have a poem like this so I can easily relate you did a good job but the second to last stanza through me off a little bit 4.5/5

It is a really descriptive poem, its quite apparent from the start that this is going to be a really emotional piece. I think you definitely did a good job of getting not only your point across but of getting your emotions out.

Strugles a bit in the structure department, which is a shame as the title and storyline are really bold. Maybe you should attempt writing something sticking to a rigid style?
Just a little suggestion.

Overall its an enjoyable poem to read, with some improvements .. could be great.

~Pete.

The emotional impact of this piece was pretty deep to tell you the truth. I really found the emotions to be portrayed with such sadness. Your word choice simple yet effective and I liked the meaning behind this. I do agree with above posters on the structure I think if you changed it a little bit it would make the flow seem alot better. Overall a 4/5~Mel

I give it 5/5 i can see the potential u had made in this poem. the sadness are truly deep and it has a great meaning!

That is a great poem keep it up =]