What a beautiful and heart warming story!

I loved the emotions you described the and detail you put into it. It was quite effective. The imagery was flawless and the poem as a whole made me smile. Well done *5/5*

Hey,
aww such a sweet and beautiful story..
I like the emotion in it and the flow is nice.
but I the ending is a bit abrupt, maybe you could make it a little bit longer? but you definitely deserve a 5/5 from me;)
kisses stephanie

Made me smile, very moving. I got nothing new at the moment, so you don't have to comment mine. :P Keep up the good work. ~Zach

A really touching story. I liked the choosing of words and the whole feeling you created in this poem. 5/5

This is totally true. It really does starts like that. Great job. Definately on my favs. 5/5

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This is such a sweet and cute story. It is so easy to imagine the scene and the emotions behind it.

The flow seemed to change half way through the poem. the first half seemed more like a script, while the second, was more poetic, I guess you could say. Good nonetheless, I think I even blushed a little.

This was an excellent poem! i can so imagine this actually happening! amazing job, sunshine! :D i will always be a fan of your work! hugs!

Awe. that was beautiful.
5/5.

Awwwww hun this is sooo sweet and cute, i read it and it made me smile!!!! awww so beautifully written!!!!! :D 5/5
- ali x

Good piece.. portrays good emotion which i really liked..

Awwz that was rele cute....and i love the flow of it!!!

Awww...that just warms the heart 5/5

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Aww... this is such a beautiful story within the poem! I love it. Well done!