Wow..that was emotional...you are very talented and you wrote it with what seems so much ease..it just flowed off the tongue. what i really like about it most was that there was no need for smut or foul language..which i think many people find hard to write about this sort of thing with out it, but you did awesome and i felt like it was me!! you should read my poem "unknown place" i tihnk you might like it..same sort of thing xx

Thanks... It all happened recently so...

You put that into words very well. It was easy to read. The only thing I thought you could improve on was the ending. It just seemed to stop abruptly. But, very good.

It was a great poem, I really like the story in it... Anyway to improve this I would suggest you to use 'descriptive words' so the reader can really picture the poem. Anyway keep up the good work!

Hey girl it is really heart crying ur having real talent in this age oh my god wen u will be grown u can win big poetry award get on & go with it...

That poem is so real and true it made me remember my first time

Wow that was AWESOME you have talent