Very nice poem,, Great rythme, and nice flow...
You give a perfect picture about what that angel do.. It made me remember about this world, which full of this kind of creature.. So nice outside, very dark inside.. ^^
Love this poem..
keep up the good work,,
this poem is amazing. i especially love the ending "No one ever guesses, I'm the one who caused it all". so cleaver and perfectly written. i loved it. the flow is impecable and i love the theme.
Wow, this poem totally took my breath away. I like the way you made the poem rhyme and it is very well written.
"Intricately spun lies, spinning rapidly out of control
Such a long time ago, that darkness took my soul
Enjoying all of the drama, and many tears that fall
No one ever guesses, I'm the one who caused it all"
^^This was my favorite stanza because to me it was what topped the rest of the poem. Excellent poem. 10/5<---if this was possible, but for now a 5/5
This poem is well written. Although you have a few spelling/grammer errors. I loved this poem mainly becuase I can relate to it in many ways and then again I can't. I love your style of writing and the tone of this poem.
Wow....i hate it...when..people do this...to...add..to...comments...like, they'll do what im doing right now...anyway, dont count this...
just this stuff =)
anyway, omg, that poem gave me goosebumps...i can totaly get into your mindset, how u play games with people and sit back to enjoy the show..sounds like a good idea. but yeah, most of the poems i read that are "for contsests" are crappy, this one, pretty good, some of the rythm seems a bit forced, but the rhymes tie all of it together. i loved the ending,
"im the one who caused it all"
that was like, awesome!
Wow...this sounds like a couple of women I know....I think the term is passive aggressive....and you have captured it perfectly!
Your rhyming is perfect...flow flawless....I can actually picture the little witch smiling!
"Thinking I'm so sweet, when all I do is play mind games
Taking pleasure in shame, purposely causing pain
A flawless exterior, hides all the evil that I hold inside
Relishing in the fact, that so many people have cried"
^my favorite of the verses.....hard to believe there really people like this....nicely written....very sad but true! Take care, Debbie
I love it.... kind of sets a person smack dab in the middle of a high school girl drama... and what you think all the "mean girls" are thinking... i like how you portrayed the story gives nice detail of everything. Excelent. keep it up
You are a great writer with an amazing gift to show so much emotion in every piece that you do. You couldnt have chose any better words than what you did with this one. Along with the others another fantastic piece. Great Job hope to read more. :)