This poem is really good i like every thing that you said in it keep up the great work

"You have broken my soul now
So control me as only you know how"

^^Love those lines. I found them to hold so much power and depth, in so few words. Favourite part of the poem.

I thought you used a lot of fillers in here (You, and, I, the etc) and I thought that somewhat disturbed the flow in places.

Other than that though, I enjoyed this, it held my interest throughout, flow was okay for the most part, and I liked the imagery you portrayed.

On the whole, good job.

Betrayal... this poem was as i wud usually say awsome but i can't even really describe how it was to read! seriously awsome job!

It's sad. :[
and so good.
i really like it.
*hugs*
5/5.