Very well written, though ending it with a three lined stanza instead of a two lined stanza, to me, felt like it set off the flow; this is only my opinion though. It was very creative and I loved that you used a broader vocabulary then most. Keep up the good work ^_^ *5/5*

I really liked this poem, again you have a really talent at creating the shorter pieces which are carved with deep emotions. Your rhyming couplets are always powerful and the flow is spot on. It doesn't flaw what so ever. A really good poem. ~Mel

You truly have a way with words and your language use just creates flawless imagery.

'Drowning, lost, i set myself free,
My dreams unfulfilled are now lost in that sea."
^beautiful.

Well done *5/5*

I truly feel that for the most part the true meaning of this piece will be lost on the masses of this site. Simply because the meaning of this piece is so deep and the vocabulary is to such a high standard.

I honestly love the purgatorial feeling you are subjected to when reading this piece, it brings you into this world of utter unknowing and complete disillusionment.

I think your imagery in this piece is up there with the best I have ever seen on this site.

The last line is simply a showstopper, not only does it complete the poem beautifully but it leaves the reader feeling incomplete. Almost as an embodiment of the subject.

I would normally like to offer something to change or adapt in a poem I comment on, yet I would not change a single syllable in this piece. It is simply remarkable.

~Pete.

This is my favorite out of the three. The emotion was deep and the flow wasn't BAMB like the other peices. It worked well and I enjoyed reading it. =]

You have talent, i can see that clearly now. You did this one well, the flow was good, and the emotion was strong.
Love always, Tara-Kay
x

"Rains of death began to fill the sea"
That line sounds so spooky... ^^
Great poem with nice rhytmes..
Short but could describe what you want to tell well...
Good job,,
Keep up the good work..
5/5

It's a brilliant poem. You must be a talented writer. I love the words and the way you express in this one. Of course you deserve another 5 from me!!!

I like it...it's very good!! i wish i was that good at writing poems.

Beautiful. Truly; words written, dripping with darkness. Your vocabulary may just exceed mine, and this poem shows an intriguing talent, that I wish to consume more of.
So, I will read more ...
But I'm often too lazy to comment.

And yet againt, another great rhyming poem. The flow absolutely great. 5/5

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Wait, this is my favourite! I like this one too =)
~ Keep it real ~
Nicole xx