Amazing poem! i loved the emotion that was portrayed throughout this piece. It was easy easy to relate to, and i could see myself in your shoes.. wonderful job keep it up!

Very fabulous... u know how u start and arrange the words that it made ur poem fantastic and i can see that all lines are really expressed well... a very lovely piece and outstanding work of urs keep it up! 5/5

This is really good... the flow is great and your words are too... there is nothing in this world better then love

Really beautiful poem and very well written. I can relate to the emotion you put into this one. Great job, 5/5!!!

So deep this is by far the best poem i have read to date..i absolutely love it 5/5

I am getting a feeling like the passion is no longer there
^ It should be "that" not "like"

Awh, this was quite sad. I felt it was a little bit cliquey though and this spoiled it a little for me. However, it obviously comes from the heart and the emotions are clear. The flow was pretty good and the descriptions worded well to explain how you were feeling. Try using words that are less common to add interest. 4/5

I think this poem was good, but not great. There were a few things that hindered it. First of all, the verb tense in several of the lines was distracting. 'observing' 'feeling' 'looking' 'hugging' 'seeing,' too much active present tense. After all you switch to plain old present tense later in the poem. The active present tense you use in the earlier parts of the poem aren't even used to construct full sentences. Rather, they are just dangling participles.

Secondly, I felt that there were a couple of lines that, due to either wording or length, disrupted the flow of the poem.
"I am getting a feeling like the passion is no longer there"
and
"I was and always will be the one who bothers"
both messed me up when I read the poem. The verb 'to bother' requires an object. And for some reason the first of the two sentences is just too cumbersome, syllable-wise.

I thought this was good, you've expressed a deep desire for this person.

The flow was a bit off in the middle but all in all, great job.

I think i better name would be eternal smile, but its still an amazing poem!!!
there is a lot of great discription.
well written!!