Comments : My Soulmate.

  • This is a really beautiful poem, but it lacked the structure. Maybe if you put it into stanzas, it would look even more beautiful. 5/5

    <mOnStRiTo's pRiNcEsS>

  • 16 years ago

    by Jessica

    This was pretty good love. The flow was a bit off a points, try and make most of the lines about the same length and this will help improve this. I also liked how you used some more advanced vocabulary, try and use more of this. The emotions in it were quite clear as well. Nice job love. 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Romantic Lover

    I thought this was a very nice poem and full of emotion. I agree with the comment on each line being a similar length. It's hard to do sometimes. But you can definitely feel the love and passion in this piece.

    Nice job.

  • 16 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    A beautiful Peice, full of heartfelt emotions.
    It flowed pretty well, and was interesting.

    Keep it up.
    --Elly.

  • 16 years ago

    by SCARECROW

    It flows pretty well, the sentence lengths are varied but not so out of whack that it becomes difficult to read.
    Hmm~
    Maybe seperating it into stanzas would help?
    I don't want to tell you to change your work because it's up to you to do what you like with your own pieces~
    ^^
    It was great, though, and I really really liked it~
    Keep writing!

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    It was a sweet poem, flow is okay but you have some minir errors :)

    First...

    Capitalize the I's

    And

    (Youre) the light that brightens my dark mind
    = You're