Good one. nice display of emotion. good flow. 5/5

Intriguing

GREAT poem I Like it keep up the good work!!! ^^

Excellent write! The flow and the structure was superb. I liked your choice of words, you are very talented.

The 2nd line in the 1st stanza, should be shortened a little so it matches the sylable count of the rest. It kind of messes the flow up a little.

For example, take it from being this:

"The one that has my heart,
Forever you shall stay within my thoughts,
Entrapped in my soul,
Held close to my heart,"

To something like this:

The one that has my heart,
Forever within my thoughts,
Entrapped in my soul,
Held close to my heart,

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Also, the 1st line in the 3rd stanza, "u" should be changed to "you" it not only makes it look a whole lot better, but it makes the reader feel you are more intelligent and profesional.

Overall a great write, keep up the good work.

Peace, Joe