The flow was excellent and the first stanza really stood out and said alot to me
while reading i actually got a picture of a girl in my head doing this and then running back to her room
it was well expressed
5/5

Whoa..amazing 1...keep it up!

Whoa..amazing 1...keep it up!

I can feel how much you live your day
i hope some day you find your way

i can relate to what you ahve said
i have too sit their and laid

i just wish you can work more
the rhyming is somthing i adore

and the lengh of the lines you dont forget
i hope their big difrences, is somthing you set

:)