Oh wow ... this is something I could truly relate with. The power and meaning here just left me ... amazed. It reminds me of that song "Hate that I love you" Sometimes you cannot help who you love and even if they do not turn out to be what you expected, your heart is still occupied by them. I truly loved the last two lines of your last stanza. It was a perfect way to end the poem.
"I hate going to sleep because I know your in my dreams"
^I think you mean "you're"
I think I'm definately going to have to favourite this poem. It was so fantastic in every single way, the word choice and the flow were absolutely perfect. Just by reading your words I can think back and remember a time I felt like this, nothing hurts as bad,but nothing tastes as sweet as love. Amazing job 5/5 GG23
This poem is EXACTLY how my life is like. therez this guy. that i absolutely LIVE for. but he doesnt love mehh like i love him. && it fillz my soul with sorrow. && it fillz my eyes with tears everyday. i know how you feel. this poem was very well written && i absolutely love it. 5/5.
"Hell, even the stars lie to me these days..." What a simple line, yet with powerful meaning. I really enjoyed this poem and thought it was excellent, although I wish to understand your intention by putting certain words in [brackets]. Overall, great job though!
This was such a beautiful piece. Honestly I fell for it deeply. The emotions you portrayed were painful and hit my heart. I liked the flow, it didn't go off track at all. I liked the sarcasm you contrasted with sadness it was powerful. "Hell, even the stars lie to me these days..." That line was capturing. I'm not so sure why you have brackets around words. It might be just your little thing but it doesn't effect the poem what so ever.
A great poem filled with so much emotion. Simple word choice yet so effective. Overall a great read. Well done. ~Mel
Breathtaking. Absolutely breathtaking. I can completely (once again) relate. There's a beautiful desperation to it that draws sympathy from the reader, and forces them to be hit with the emotions you're feeling. Very powerful.
I love this poem it so sad but breath taking... the lines
"...I hate admitting to myself that my heart is still yours;
But it wouldn't be quite fair if I lied, now would it?..."
this part just made me think that i still can't get over my ex bcuz he was my first and only. and u cant just forget about ur first rite. anyway keep it up and like i said i love the poem.!!!!!!
I lOVE this poem.. its amazing.. its such an enjoyable poem to read because of the simple words and flawless flow.. the emotions are strong and the word choice is put together very nicely.. i especially love the last line it ends the poem with perfection
Wow this poem is really powerful and amazing!.. I can relate to every line in this poem because I went through the same exact thing.. and still haven't gotten through it 100% Excellent job writing about the way you feel and making it sound so amazing. Nice job. Keep it up! =)