Behind The Waterfall

by FridusBlueheaven   Nov 26, 2007


Title : Behind The Waterfall
Written By : Fridus Blueheaven

Behind the waterfall, place where we used to belong
Where we spent our spare time when we were young
You promised me, that soon this love will go strong
But after all, you only had me waited for so long

Behind the waterfall, the vow has made through heart
I promised you I will love you right there from start
You promised me that our sacred love will never be apart
But lately that I found your heart has gone really far

Behind the waterfall, we didn't even care about cold
Then you promised me that I'm the only one to hold
Where the happiness alive and all the feeling has told
But somehow now I found everything is growing old

Behind the waterfall, the water washed every our pain
The feelings that usually unwritten, suddenly unchained
You said that you'll keep the love, never put it in vain
But today, I found that nothing about us still remains

Behind the waterfall, we shared the laughter time to time
Those beautiful cliffs, there are places that we used to climb
You always told me that our love will be growing fine
But all that I feel is that from now you are no more mine

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  • 16 years ago

    by Michelle18

    Aww... *tear* .. very sad ending...

    i loved it...flow was good.5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by JustKristina

    This is another great write. I think that the second stanza, last line doesn't not fit at all. But that is the only thing that i would change about this. otherwise, it is a very good hearttouching poem! keep up the great work! :]

  • 16 years ago

    by EssenceOfLace

    Very good. although i think that this
    "Behind the waterfall, we didn't even care about cold
    Then you promised me that I'm the only one to hold
    Where the happiness alive and all the feeling has told
    But somehow now I found everything is growing old"

    is my favorite stanza.

    also the correct wording for
    "But all that I feel is that from now you are no more mine"
    is
    "But all that I feel is that from now on you are no longer mine"

    that just how i see it.
    5/5

    Oh and ive already rated this poem before

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    The imagery here was just flawlessly beautiful. I could picture everything clearly in my mind and the emotions were real deep. The last two lines were so powerful and held such meaning that they blew me away. Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Hawaiizang3l

    Aw, what a sad poem! beautifully written though, love the flow & the rhyming!!

    i wasnt sure if this line was written right thouhg "water washed every our pain" ...im not sure.

    but overall good job!!
    take care -n- keep it up!!

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