Comments : My Faded Melody Still Plays For You

  • 12 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Beauty and sadness majestically intertwined through the whole piece... truly precious piece of love poetry, deeply touching and filled with excellently expressed emotions. I like your descriptions- the imagery that you created is truly vivid and captivating.
    The ending is also very effective, it rounds the whole poem greatly.
    My favorite lines are:

    -I'll paint you a picture, with the brush I have made.
    The piece of my soul, that - for you- has remained.-
    ^^^
    wow... love those!

    Keep writing!
    5/5 from me

  • 12 years ago

    by Tammie

    This... is beautiful.
    The way you expressed yourself so metaphorically and emotionally is mind blowing. The flow is so flawless and the rhyming isn't too basic and not forced at all. The title is capturing and again, this is very beautifully written.
    This is going on my favourites. :] Excellent piece, I must read more of yours. 5/5

    Tammie

  • 12 years ago

    by Ike Dizzle

    I think this is my favorite one written by you. Great job. 5/5
    -vino

  • 12 years ago

    by SADADDY

    Wonderfully penned and worded, thank you for sharing it with us. May peace and joy fill your heart each and everyday.

    sadaddy

  • 12 years ago

    by Gooberz

    And u did not want to be a song writer this is good real good 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    I really loved this poem, thank you for writting it so beautifuly =]

    The flow was excellent and the choice of wording was brilliant, Your an amazing writter! Great job!
    I also loved the thought put into this piece, Its definitely one of the best iv'e seen on here in a while =]
    5/5!!

  • 12 years ago

    by justeene

    Brilliant poem, your words flowed so freely, nothing bad to say about it well done and keep it up
    Jussie

  • 12 years ago

    by kevin Boundy AKA the ghost

    Great poem i wouldnt change anything its got a kind of rythm that flows through it perfectly keep up the good work

  • 12 years ago

    by Polaroid

    The emotion you put into that was phenominal, I liked how you devoted it to a group of lost lovers... I also really liked the little piece of personification (If thats the right word) you put into it: the painting, brush, paint ect.

    another great one

    polaroid

  • 12 years ago

    by WaitAutumn

    Love the images you've given - -teardrop of ink- -words on my lips-

    -Just to show you the side of me, that's been torn apart.- feels like.. the writer, really wants-needs to other to feel and see that
    -torn apart- as if desperate.

    i loved the message in the end.
    Just amplifies the whole poem.

    very true.
    loved it n_n
    5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Shane Peate

    Very well-constructed piece. You write with detailed and specific imagery that is right on. I know I haven't been around in a while but I'm thinking of coming back to writing even though my stay here was brief as it was before. Nice to see you're still writing.