Comments : Time Heals a Broken Heart (yeah, right)

  • 16 years ago

    by Tammie

    This tells such a heartfelt, and heartbreaking tale in this poem. It's strongly filled with emotion, I can almost feel the disappointment in your words. The flow is flawless and I like the parts in brackets, it's different.
    Excellent piece. 5/5

    Tammie

  • 16 years ago

    by MyEscape

    And left me begging a shadow for something more,
    &
    [You`re all the same, just with different faces.]

    Were just amazing lines! i mean, where do you come up with your imagery and wording? It's phenomenal. I love your work. The flow's always good whether it rhymes or not, and nine times out of ten it can intrigue me so much that I don't wanna stop reading!
    Good job!
    *ME*

  • 16 years ago

    by inlovexinpain

    This was an excellent piece. I was quite impressed. Funny thing is, my boyfriend, well ex now, broke up with me earlier today.. I didn't cry, but this poem brought the tears because this is EXACTLY how I feel.
    Excellent work. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by ABake

    First off, the title really caught my eyes. I think that everyone can relate to this because people always say time heals everything and at the time your like whatever. Lol.

    Second, you had me hooked on the first line. I knew that the peice was going to be deep and the story behind it would be amazing. I guess I was right. Lol. The flow was not off at all. No breaks or anything.

    This stanza>>

    You ran for your life once your feet hit the ground,
    And left me begging a shadow for something more,
    But we both know that in reality, a little heartbreak,
    Ha, that`s nothing compared to what`s up your sleeve.
    [You`re all the same, just with different faces.]

    Geeze. I loved it. The emotion is deep and there is almost a hint of sarcasm added in. I think that the line about begging a shadow for something more was just amazing. It kinda makes you think and then something just clicks and you know exactly what you are talking about.

    Also, your word choice in this peice was great. Overall, and amazingly written peice. Great job!
    5.5

    Amber :]]

  • 15 years ago

    by Espoirfailed

    I was away for a while and i almost (almost) forgot about your work. what a good job i didn't.
    your style has matured and now seems to have a heaviness and a pragmatic darkness which is absolutely mesmerising.
    the way your words are put together work so well and the emotion in this poem is more than evident.
    thanks for inspiring me again
    xx