Comments : Those Eyes (title contest)

  • 13 years ago

    by Solus

    This is pure gold.....so strong and deep. Hmm.....I wonder.....

  • 13 years ago

    by xoxShorteexox

    "Crimson red glows inside,
    Never leaves, o yes, he's tried.
    He tried to cut the pain away,
    But he knew, it would not stray.

    So his fear of these drowning eyes,
    Led him to the place, where he now lies,
    afraid of winning a loosing game,
    his dying eyes remained the same."

    Okay, the o needs to be oh.
    And loosing needs to be losing. Then it's flawless, babe.
    Take care.
    5/5