Comments : I wanna play

  • 16 years ago

    by Beautiful Forever

    Such an amazing concept and very beautifully written! The flow was good, the word choice was decent, and the concept was astonishing.

    The first and last lines really made the poem.

    "Look into my eyes and fear me, or I will bring you down like a poorly made wall"

    "This is my game and I want to play"

    They were both very effective. I really liked this poem and its worthy of a 5/5