Excuse me miss, could you pass the sugar?
Your bitter words leave a terrible aftertaste.

I must say I adored them lines. So bitter sweet which is the effect I know you were going for. This whole piece held so much sarcasm within each line giving a unique effect over the atmosphere. The flow great, you pulled it off nicely to give a smoothe effect. I like the meaning portrayed behind this because so many people can relate to this in their own way, or have their own interpratation of this. Such an amazing piece. Really good to read a piece by you again which was so enjoyable. Glad I took the time. Well done. ~Mel

Wonderful poem. excellent. the details were already said by slave to the music. still well keep writing

Interesting topic, I love this piece, it is very unqiue and written on so good way, you did truly fantastic job! I absolutely love that ending line and the choice of words is incredible, original too.
All in all I must say wonderful poem, very deep and filled with amazingly expressed emotions.

Omg... Wow... speechless...
I need some time to get my brain functions back lol
This is absolutely amazing, soaked in sarcasm and truly excellently written. Whole poem is filled with original thoughts. The atmosphere that you created is powerful and whole poem holds very deep meanings. I like the metaphorical content.
I can't choose my favorite stanza, whole piece is just breathtaking.
Excellently done!

I'd be lying if I said that I didn't miss you,
But I know that I love you more than she ever did.

it realy relates to me... i like ur poetry good work...

Oh Tammie. This is just..woah. DUDE. I LOVED it. This is SO my kind of thing! How glad am I that you chose this poem for me to read? VERY GLAD. Hahaha :p.

Ok. The very first line is just brilliant; you immediately cause the reader to question, which is an impressive and important quality. The way in which you continue and hold the words so beautifully together is just amazing. The use of brackets to emphasize the depth of the third line is really effective, and you seem to continue with this very powerful diction throughout.

"From the beginning I've tainted reality.
But the sugar is too far out of reach this time" = Marvellous.

Dude. I am actually at a loss of words. Everything, every detail within this piece was just spot on and so direct. I didn't have to read it twice to reassure myself of the meaning; you made it so clear what you were saying through your use of simple language. There are many potential poets who lose themselves in a web of words trying to create one majestic line, then the following one ends up very weak - why? Because they don't keep it simple. And keeping it simple is what makes the poem effective, funnily enough.

I'm going to end my babbling. This was an amazing and very impressive write, Tammie. I am PROUD. Well done (: x