Okay this is my second comment the first one got erased...so this is a little shorter. I thought the 3rd verse was the best, I could relate to it, the 4th verse the worst because of the use of the word cynical didn't make sense. The ryhming seemed to drop off between the 4th and 7th verses, almost like you weren't trying as hard although I thought the idea behind verse 6 was good. The last verse I really liked as well, so 3 and 8 are the winners in my book. :-)

That was so cool! very original!!! the flow could've been better in some places, but overall, great job for a venting poem, lol! i know how those go! just let it out! let it out!