Thats just so sad, i half know what thats like

good poems keep it uP!!!

Very good. I loved it! 5/5

This is a great poem. i literally almost cried because i have felt like this at times. Great job! 5/5

Right firstly i have to say something, you are a very very very talented poet. your quotes, well they catch your attention straight away and i've probally read them all by now, there unique and there interesting..you write it ho wyou say it.

anyway to the poem, i'm glad to see you keep your unique style throughout everything you right.
and unforunity ive felt lik this a very long time ago, and it brought back memories. you brought up a powerful subject in this poem, sleeping with different people sometimes people think it helps them feel loved and cared about. but after a while you see that they are only there for one reason and one reason only.

right firstly you don't really have a structure but its an emotional write and therefore this can be overlooked and sometimes it can appeal to the subject in which the poem is written about.

Feeling defeated, used and dirty,
She finds her clothes and walks our the door,
Passes a mirror, But looks the other way,
She doesn't like what she sees anymore.
- this has to be my favorite verse, so powerful and it gives you such a vivid image of this girl, although it may vary it is similar in everyones mind.

the only part of this poem i don't like is that fact that you have here sleeping near a tree, it doesn't really fit in if you change the place into comething different, then that may help..like a shop doorway or something. i no it makes her sound homeless and shes not just unloved but really i think it would work.

the last verse is a good conclusion, its sad although its still a conclusion. its got a statement, but its negative and sad.

vocabulary well it can be improved, slightly but very good.

grammar, glad to see that you have comma in, people sometimes forget, although not every line needs to start with a capital letter and not every line needs to finish with a comma. just a bit of advice to make it more professional

amy xxxxx

I loveddd it!
itsz a lil sad but..i can relate too it =/

Sad & tragic imagery, though I know the fealing & fealings come from the heart, this is after all poetry & not short stories lovely stradegy strive on & keep fighting

A very sad poem..awesome though..
good choice of words and it was great how you described everything..
great write..keep it up. :)

Woooooooooooow! awesome poem.. Unfortunately these things are happening in our world today, but moste people perfer to turn their heads and walk away =/ I am actually voulanteering to help people like that girl so this poem wnet straight through my heart!

Awsome poem!
Its realy sad, Ur wording is fantastic.

This was a really good piece, i felt sad just reading it because i can relate to parts of this as well.

well done.