Ohhhh my god!:)
this was incredible. I read it out loud to myself:)
i was so excited.
each line kept me wondering what was going to happen next. the storyline and imagery was AMAZING.
i couldn't find anything wrong with word choice or anything.
this was truly, an unbelievable poem.
It was so worth waiting for.:)))

GREAT JOB.
each poem amazes me more and more.
i can't wait to see what you have coming next.
this was awesome jousting, and an outstanding fight.
:)

--Tay<3333

~<3
The ending is unique, and thus is LOVE~
Well done!

This was a very unusual poem. i dont think ive ever read one about jousting lol, but i got the message behind it as well. very unique, so originality gets a 10
hope you dont mind if i critique yours as well lol

"The jousting arena,
Provided a wonderous view,
For each of the spectators,
To see this thing though."
the second line kind of broke the flow

and in the seventh stanza, the rythym was different than that of all the others.

but other than that, i thought it was a fantastic poem. wonderful job! 5*5
Kimberly

I like it a lot... Interesting and very unique poem. The story behind it is great and the rhythm that follows emotions through the whole piece is exciting. The twist in the end is very sad and tragic yet very effective.
The only thing I don't like are the rhymes because they seemed too typical. I don't want to offend you, that is just my opinion but I think that sometimes it's better to write non rhyming poetry then to force rhymes.
All in all, great work!
Keep writing
5/5

Oh wow, Great story..

I fell from my horse,
And bled where I lie,
This wasn't a victory,
For I'm going to die.

I would add <this day> to the verse cause it seems to fit but its great the way it is.

An Excellent write.
Truly, you portrayed this very well. The tittle really caught my attention, and the poem didn't let me down.
Very Attention grasping.
Keep it up:)
--Elly.

Nice detail I like how it walked you through the whole scene... nice work. loved it, keep it up.
Mollie

Simlpy love it yea thanks for the help ..