Comments : First time ever.

  • 16 years ago

    by Vincent Thornsberry

    Wow , nice poem, may i make a suggestion?
    change line:
    therefor I know, I'm gonna get stronger as i grow older.

    to:
    Therefore I know,
    I'm gonna get stronger as older I grow.
    I think it makes it flow a little better 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by hadia

    Thats really good.