Comments : I'm Not Dead, Darling

  • 14 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Very, very powerful and effective. I can relate to the emotions that you expressed here. I like your intense tone and whole great monologue.
    The repetition of the first stanza in the end left great impression on me- it was fantastic way to encircle whole poem.
    You did good job with rhymes- they are not typical and the rhyming don't seem forced which is excellent.
    The fourth stanza is my favorite.
    All in all, greatly done!

  • 14 years ago

    by Jason Meres

    A little sad, a little dark, and unquestionably about life, yet it wouldn't have been quite so powerful in any catagory but this. A tremendously heartbreaking verse, especially to whomever it was meant for, I imagine.

  • 14 years ago

    by Ike Dizzle

    Dang..that's good. It's good to not let anything keep you down. Great job. 5/5
    -vino

  • 14 years ago

    by Andrew Reed

    Darla sorry

  • 14 years ago

    by Cindy

    Very deep and intense words within this poem.
    Good job!
    Take Care Cindy
    Happy New Year

  • 14 years ago

    by Sorefromreality

    It was overall a wonderful poem.

    ui like the concept, i have a friend like that.

    i love the emotion spi;lled in and the rhyme scheme is pretti good.

    the only flaw is this line:
    Yet anything you ever did never really made sense

    it seems jumbled and hard to read, mayb try

    "yet nothing u did ever made any sense."

    k?
    loves,
    ~sore

  • 14 years ago

    by pookiengurgi

    Emotions perfected in writing!loved it!!