My White Room

by Curing the Comon Cliche   Dec 28, 2007


I am here
inside my mind
wasting thoughts
and thinking time

watching my rose
whither away
your roses are red
my roses are dead

your violets are blue
mine are gray
but blue enough
to get through my day

sugar is sweet
your heart is complete
but your in the sunshine
and I'm in the rain

but when you are here
my roses are RED
my violets are BLUE
my sugar is SWEETER
but you are a cheater

you don't need me
like I need you
I guess my violets
will never be blue

You said "how can I stay"
I said "find a way"
You said "I must go"
My heart said "you'll never know"

you'll be gone
and not miss us
I'll be gone
I took the bus

to my white room
inside my mind
where I waste thoughts
and I think time

Again REALLY appreciate ALL comments and votes. I would really like criticism and feedback and it means the world to me. Thank you.

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  • 16 years ago

    by StandStill

    WOW. you definitely can see the improvement in just wording alone. not to mention, the feeling in your poems has been like HUGELY improved on, which i'm glad for.

    you don't need me
    like I need you
    I guess my violets
    will never be blue

    ^ hahaha. irony.

  • 16 years ago

    by GoyaCracker

    Wow. thats really good.

  • 16 years ago

    by Danielle

    Hey, I like this poem a lot because I went through the same thing.
    Keep writing, its great; very inspirational

    & thanks for the comment. haha.

  • 16 years ago

    by SweetDreamz

    Theres alot of powerful imagery there.well done. I really like this. ;p

  • 16 years ago

    by Talieka

    This is a reali good poem, but it is also reali sad =[
    keep up the good work =]
    5/5