Wow... this is absolutely fantastic! You created great, dark atmosphere and very vivid imagery. Truly intense and effective piece. You said so much in this short poem which is excellent.
Keep up!

I agree with the other person
truley fantastic..

This is a good poem, like the structure and how it paints a picture, with few words. Excellent work.

I love the darkness of it . darkness is every where , wether people want to see it or not.