Hey. This was a really sweet poem.] I can tell that it means alot to you, and I hate to criticize the ones with that much heart. So I won't.
I think you should keep it as it is, so you can remember it as you felt it when you wrote it.
Make sense?
I'm sure your brother is proud of you for being so strong, and proving your ability to put emotion into words.
And I hope you keep it up. :)