Comments : The Pigeon [Parody]

  • 16 years ago

    by xxTaegan Emilyxx

    Very beautiful. Its so beautifully written. The words and emotions were great. Its very original and i really enjoyed it.
    xx
    Taegan Emily

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow...
    I love this. Great idea to write a parody of "The Raven". This is truly entertaining from the beginning to the end. It kept my attention in each stanza. Truly great work. You did amazing job with rhymes and flow, making it similar like in "The Raven"
    Creative piece, filled with humor.
    Excellently done!

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    "Upon one calm and peaceful evening, for my parlor I was leaving,
    A winged form from heaven sent up to my window flew.
    So statuesque on window sill, majestic pigeon stern and still.
    Instantly I know I will, remove this beauty from my view."

    ^^ I love this opening. This is just beautiful. The imagery you created in these few lines alone are amazing, they create such pretty pictures in my mind, while simutaneously setting the tone for a beautiful piece. I can't help but be drawn into the poem and want to continue reading afer such a fantastic opening.

    "Open up the pallid pane to tell this wondrous creature "Shoo"
    That's exactly what I'll do"

    ^^ Hahahahaha. That made me giggle. I love the easy humor in those few lines.

    2nd stanza: This made me smile as well. I don't think I've read a parody before, but I'm certainly enjoying this one. Again, your use of imagery always amazes me.

    ""How can this tiny, placid creature be causing such ado?"
    Quoth the pigeon only "coo" "

    ^^ I love this...this is humorous, while at the same time the reader can see that you are getting quite irritated at the pigeon.

    "Quoth the pigeon only "coo" "

    ^^ I'm loving the repetition of this line, it definitely brings a smile to my lips.

    Stanza 4 and 5:
    Favourite stanzas of the piece so far. How you managed to pack in so much depth and emotion, while keeping up the humor is beyond me. Along with keeping your flow perfect, is only showing once more what a talent you have for writing.

    Last two stanza's are just perfect. So many poems are fantastic throughout and then have a very weak ending..but you managed to make the ending hold as much depth and power as the rest of the poem put together.

    "I wish to scream my utter joy as the beast has bid adieu.
    Yet I can only utter "coo" "

    ^^ LOVE that. That is just fantastic, a brilliant ending, that brought yet another giggle to my lips.

    Your flow in this was flawless, I didn't find it to falter once, while you managed to portray wonderful imagery throughout the piece.

    I know I said I would be harsh..but I don't think there's a single thing I dislike about this piece. I love it.

    I remember you saying you wasn't sure if you liked it or not, and I have no idea why..this is a beautiful write, filled with elegance and beauty.

    I did go and read the original before I read this and Pete...you should br proud of this. This is amazing.

  • 16 years ago

    by Bryan

    I like how you made it dark also, another great poem by you pete, always did like parody poems, grammer is perfect, i give it a 5/5 again!!! keep these coming!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Kate Hicks

    Fantstic Mr Poe. Very clever. 5/5