Comments : Call Me Cliche If You Must

  • 16 years ago

    by Tammie

    This is a very different outcome to what I'd expect from the title, yet it is exactly what I'd expect. I can't explain what I mean there so that you'd understand easily but I love it. Aha, points for that to begin with.
    Love poems can be hard to write if you just can't find the words, and I can't say that I've had that problem too much, yet that's different.
    Anyway! I'm going off track here.
    I absolutely love the simplicity of this poem. I love the structure, original and it worked well for what you were saying. The flow was steady and your vocab was beautiful too. The ending stood out to me most, how you said the 'beauty flowed into your mind', that truely was beautiful, to me.
    One thing though, just a typo on the second line;
    'Sweet thoughts of your linger in my mind,'
    'your' should be 'you'.

    Beautifully sweet poem, Mel. 5/5

    Tammie xo

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Very original. The simplicity of this poem highlighted greatly expressed emotions in the most outstanding ways. Beautiful piece of love poetry, filled with touching thoughts. It sounds so sincere, like it's written straight from the heart. I like the structure of the whole piece a lot, you created interesting flow from the beginning to the end.
    Greatly done!

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Wow, just wow! Very few people can truly touch me with their love poems but this one is so beautiful. Ending is powerful! Amazingly done, this is so creative and unqiue piece. Wow, I am quite impressed.

  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    A very cute write. it was sweet and the ending was very touching and heartfelt. Something about this poem really gets to me, but in a good way, but im not sure, exactly, what it is. something outstanding about this poem. and i really like your structure. The beginning was very alluring. :] i like the repetition of the line "what is love" and the ending, the very last line, was simply beautiful. an amazing write. 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Sole

    Nice write. The poem was good, flowing and simply intricate.
    It is the sort of poem that relates to any sort of Love, and is possibly one of the best defining poems to write about. You did a really good job, especially if you don't usually write them because it's hard to break a new style. I'm not sure you needed all the '...........'s, to me it seemed to cut the poem down a notch, but each to their own. Great poetry.

    Sole. x

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    Oh I just loved the ending! It was so simple yet held such an immense amount of meaning. The style you wrote in was different but one I truly enjoyed. I loved the passionate emotions you described because they were easy for me with relate with. Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by xxTaegan Emilyxx

    I didnt really like the flow but thats just me personally. This was very heartfelt and emotional.
    I liked the content and overall its a good poem.
    xx
    Taegan Emily

  • 16 years ago

    by ABake

    First, I love the title. I always wanted to use cliche in a title and I know now it really catches peoples eye. Anways-

    Those first two lines were great, I think that they not only hooked my attention but showed that you were giving an effort. Great job on that attention grabber...

    Tonight, I dream about you,
    Sweet thoughts of you linger in my mind,
    A passionate flame to burn within my heart.

    Those lines, as you said in the title call you cliche if you must, they are cliche. But you add a sort of...umm..how do I say it. Elegance and beauty to it. Which stops the whole cliche thing right there. Lol

    Also, I really liked that you put the number of ........ in front of the question "What is love" I think that everyone once or more in their life will ask this question. You added an extra emotion and it also had an affect on the way that the reader read it.

    And suddenly beauty flows into my mind

    Whoaa. I love that line. Not only can I relate but it is beautiful. My favorite line out of the whole peice. You follow it up greatly with the answer to your own question. Which is beautiful as well. Overall, a beautifully written peice. I loved the simplicity in it meanwhile the emotions were strong. Again, great job. 5.5

    Amber.

  • 16 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    Aw you have such way with words when
    it comes to love poems. They are very
    beautiful. very well done.
    5/5
    <3tay

  • 13 years ago

    by quiet lullaby

    It maybe cliche, but thats exactly why its so beautiful.
    A sweet, lovely, true poem, full of truths and hope.
    Its good to believe in love, and this poem of yours definately makes me believe.

    Well done.