Wow hun..is this ferr dylan? I'm really soory =[..but yeah breaking the lamps? sounds friggen fuunn! woot!..hah i love you..<33

Alot of people have the same format that you use..its sort of a poetic story, but it lacks a certain progression, it's a little too pushed together makes it an annoying read, at least for me. 4/5 at best