Nice work, I could really feel the pain and sorrow in this poem, and you did an amazing job writing it. Here's my favorite part:

"Everyone came up to see you
You lied peacefully in your bed,
Trying to hide our tear's from you,
Trying to understand it in our heads."

It flowed beautifully and just stuck out to me. Good job and keep up the great work!

Very sweet

This poem expressed such a deep, rough emotion. Well done.

Awwwww..... what a beautiful and heartfelt poem. I am so sorry for your loss... Your poem is so nicely written, I'm sure Sam would love it and appreciate it.. Wonderful job with the poem hon

First on the structure it felt like the flow went a bit choppy in parts

Second other then that this is a poem with raw true emotions ...

I don't think the rhyming felt forced I thought it was all good choice of words

A very good piece 5/5