True love

That was beutiful brit

Captalize your i's before it's too late. I learnt it made my poems look much better too late, and all my old poems look like throw-up.

=] Just a hint.

Okay, so I read the poem. It was a cute little poem about true love, but it just... it was only hitting the surface. You can say "that's what I wanted to do, hit the surface" and I'd say, okay, well you did a good job at it, but if you wanted to write a great poem about true love, then you would have gone more in depth. You would have spoken in more detail, with more words. I still think it's a wonderful poem, regardless of the depth, but I think with such a vast expanse of oppurtunities under the topic, you would have offered up more of yourself to this poem.

Still, you did a good job with this poem =]
5/5
~Stephen White

A beautiful piece. very well written and a very strong piece. The emotion was portrayed quite nicely and the wording was just. .great. a lot of meaning in this piece and very beautifully written. Alot of truth and very well thought out. :] i really liek it. 5/5.! :]

Awww It's beautiful! :) Can feel your strong presence in this poem. Powerful, mother- child love that is naturaly put into to system. Nice theme!
Keep writing, you'll get out of your writers block soon.
5/5

This poems good. nice work