This poems good. nice work

This poem was amazing! very sad. it sucks when you love someone but they are with someone else

"Every time we're apart I yearn to be closer"

my favorite line. stuck out the most. mainly because i feel this for someone.

5/5

Simple and yet so sad and beautiful!! great job

I feel this poem a well. Girl you have some mad skills!!!!

Awwwwww, really sweet and I can totally relate to it. Nice rhyming and effective repetition. I like the way the last line breaks away from the rest of the poem as well. 5/5

Em xXx

But everytime?
Every single time?
Wow....lol. 5/5
Great write

I liked this one okay, it was cute, but I didn't like the repetiveness of the poem, it got hard to read for me. You are a great writer though.
Keep it up!
4/5
~gabriella

So sweet and carry alot of feelings and the way you start the line keep me interest to see what next

I didn't like the repetition in this piece. Sorry, but it just didn't work for me. It seemed too immature in comparison to your other poem, and left me disappointed. Overall it's not a bad poem, I was just expecting more.

I liked the emotion in this piece, though.

Oooooooh. its so simple and has TONS of potential. First off, capitalize "I". It draws the eye instantly to an error and takes away from the greatness. But heres my real

advice:
All the lines start with "everytime" which has a real nice poetic affeect. HOWEVER, with the last like not starting with "every time is kinda interrupts the flow. and you basically have couplets due to the aabb rhyme scheme. so i would add another line. So heres my suggestion. Add another line after "Every time I see you with her I cant help but to cry" that rhymes with "cry". Then make a break after it before "Because every time I long for it to be You And I...". That will add a designated pause and have a great poetic affect. =D

Awwwww i just adroe this

Thats amazing.
I love it
So much meaning.
And I feel It.

Short................short and sweet that is lol.

This is great =)