Wow great poem lollz
pleez comment one of mine lollz

"But our past is still too much of my present
I just can't seem to forget it."

~Incredible lines, right there
A+ on creativity, although I could careless if that line is or isn't cliche. =]]]]

The only error I saw in this poem was
"Than come on and prove it to be." = "Than come on and prove it to Me."

and that's it.

This is a beautiful poem. It rings upon a cliche idea and brings a little "umph" to it. I found that it did lack an order of events, but I found that was quite alright at the same time =]

You did a wonderful job on this poem,
and I can very much so relate it to how I am feeling right now.

Good job!

5/5
~Stephen White

Oh, I forgot. Don't forget to edit the poem and change this:

"Itâ??s obvious that I'm " to "It's obvious that I'm"

~sorry, I forgot to put that in my previous comment

sdpw

Beautiful poem. The emotion was very evident and powerful. Great job and I know that feeling very well.

-Daniel