Perfect. I LOVE it. Sometimes saying nothing means the most. Silence can hold a lot of meaning. I really like the concept and the short lines. It's writen in a unique way..and I like that. Great work! =] keep it up.
Throughout the rest of the poem he last word is the first word of the next line except in the highlighted area above. I think if you fix that, the poem is excellent, creative and thought provoking. Nicely done!
This poem is unique in it's writing. Almost every last word of a stanza opens the following one. There are no rhymes, but guess it's your style. The words carry a strong message, and I liked how you played with them.